It was
It was an idea
It was beautiful in the beginning, open, complex, full of life.
But then It got hurt, It lost something important.
And then It started losing bits and pieces as those around it picked at It,
Whittled It away until It was almost nothing, and then forgot.
And then It was.
It was just an idea, damaged, alone in the back of the mind,
dull, grey, twisted, broken.
It lost sight of what It once was, what It could have been,
And It was lying among the darker, older thoughts,
The memories and the other concepts, long forgotten
And It waited. Dull, grey, twisted, broken.
But then something changed.
It waited an eternity, a year, a second, and it was again.
Something found it, or it found something, and now it is.
It emerged from the shadow, agony, rising to form something new.
Reaching, striving, asking, wanting.
It became bright, and new,
It saw what it truly could be, and what it should be
And It knew what was really possible.
It forgot. Forgot the broken, the shame, the emptiness,
Forgot the feeling and never-ending spiral, but remembered,
Oh It remembered what it was, what it said it never would be again.
It discovered the bright, shining, glowing, possible.
and It changed. It was important.
The possibilities of a plethora of additional ideas,
The swirling cosmos of the mind and the universe around It
And just how It could fit in. How It could be important.
And It grew. And It worked. And It evolved,
Until the dispirited, dejected shell of what It once was was ultimately gone
And all anything would ever see of It again
Was bright, shining, glowing, possible.
And It is.
This is some swanky poetry, Zoe! I like it! I like the cycle that the "It was" takes. It kind of reminds me of a flower; of not being anything, then becoming a little spike in the ground, and then finally growing into something beautiful. I say that because "it was" becomes "it is", and because of the use of "dull, grey, twisted, broken" to describe the flower in the earlier states. Then it becomes "bright, shining, glowing, possible" in the end. Nice Job!
ReplyDeleteThis was an amazing piece of work, Zoe. I think a lot of people can relate to what you presented here. I know I certainly did! Super fabulous job.
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic! I think this relates not only to our journey through high school, but also the journey through life as well. I really enjoyed our strenuous Chemistry journey together, and was excited to work on Group 4 with you last year as well. You're a quietly funny and hard working individual, and I wish you all the luck in the future and can't wait to see what you accomplish.
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic! I think this relates not only to our journey through high school, but also the journey through life as well. I really enjoyed our strenuous Chemistry journey together, and was excited to work on Group 4 with you last year as well. You're a quietly funny and hard working individual, and I wish you all the luck in the future and can't wait to see what you accomplish.
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem, it reminded me of, like Matt said, our journey through life/high school, and also our every day journey to get to our goals in life. I don't know how deep you were trying to go, but I think you did an awesome job and it was pretty deep to me! Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteAaaah whoa that was a really awesome poem! Like I don't even want to try to say anything about it because I feel like anything I say won't be able to capture how great it was. I think I've always liked the idea of learning from struggle, because it's something that everyone does to at least some extent. I don't know exactly what this poem meant to you, but I know that it meant something to me when I read it. I think it's a really great thought to end the year on.
ReplyDeleteThis is disturbingly beautiful. Maybe disturbingly isn't the correct word, but I'm having trouble finding a better one. So I'll just stick with the "beautiful" part.
ReplyDeleteI found myself painting my own story into this poem as I read it. I'm not sure that was your intention, but I bet a lot of people can relate to this poem. You've always astounded me with your great insight and you did not fail this time.
I've never really been able to tell what you think of me, but I hope you can tell that I think you're a really amazing person. I've enjoyed the opportunities I've had to speak with you and watch you grow from an outside point of view. Specifically in my years with you in women's chamber, I saw you grow vocally and I think in confidence. I've really enjoyed how you've expressed yourself in the time that I've known you, and that doesn't stop with this poem. You're so expressive and artistic and I love it. Our struggles make up who we are and carve us down into our own beautiful masterpiece. Thank you for sharing a bit of yours with me.
Love this, Zoe. Thank you for sharing. It's perfect!
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